Writing technique practiced for fall

[keithy_19]

I want to be a writer as many of you may know. I was told to write things eveyr day. I decided today tow rite about fall and how it can be very depressing. Enjoy.

"The sun rose early this morning. The biting cold was offset by the warmth of the sun. The sky is blue and it's the kind of sky that makes you wonder if there really is a God. The leaves that once were filled with brightness have all turned to a copper color and gently fall when a breeze comes rushing through the branches. I sit and watch and wonder how it must feel like to be a leaf. Be so vibrant one day, only to know that your time will be up when the cold comes. Knowing that you will fall to the earth and be forgotten as new, greener leaves will take your place. No one will ever think of how that one leaf fell only a short year before."


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[Melrapuo]

I like where you're going with it. Gloomy, depressing feel. Are you going to a more poetic aspect or are you trying to write it as a story?

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[walking joint]

I sit and watch and wonder how it must feel like to be a leaf. Be so vibrant one day, only to know that your time will be up when the cold comes. Knowing that you will fall to the earth and be forgotten as new, greener leaves will take your place. No one will ever think of how that one leaf fell only a short year before."


my back remebers every leaf that falls...so don't feel so bad for them. and as humans we all know our lives will at one time be up and we will soon after be forgotten and replaced by new people full of life. good luck with the writing.

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[keithy_19]

I like where you're going with it. Gloomy, depressing feel. Are you going to a more poetic aspect or are you trying to write it as a story?


For this one, I was going for poetic. But I'm also working on a novel. I have 9 pages done so far.

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[grlNIN]

...and as humans we all know our lives will at one time be up and we will soon after be forgotten and replaced by new people full of life.


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i'm not really sure...but i'm really stoned.

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[DarkHippie]

Keithy, This is good, there are a few places where it needs to be "tightened up" -- you use the Passive Voice in a few places and extra words where you need none.

If you want, PM me and I'll send you an edit.

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[BooBooKittyFuck]

great job!! i am also in the middle of a novel, first paragraph done!! what my creative writing teacher did foe us in school was give us 20 words that had nothing to do with each other and told is to write a story. mine was about the keebler elf that got fired and ended up a wino in NYC. maybe that will help.

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[DarkHippie]

mine was about the keebler elf that got fired and ended up a wino in NYC.
Whatever. Everyone knows the Keebler Elf sucks on the pipe.

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[BooBooKittyFuck]

oh trust me he was sucking more than a pipe in my story. i was suspended.

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BOOBOO....you are an animal!!!!!!!!!!

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[BooBooKittyFuck]

I was a troubled youth.

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[curtoid]

But I'm also working on a novel. I have 9 pages done so far.

Don't go by number of pages but by word counts. Pages will not give the best representation of your progress.

65,000 words is where a novel becomes a novel.

Once published, a book of about 110,000 usually comes in around 300 pages. This will not equate, though, with Microsoft word.

Decide upfront if the story is going to be character driven or plot driven (it'll make it easier when you move forward); don't always trust spell check ("artic"/"arctic"); "a lot" is two words - always; use your conversational skills from posting on here, and seeing how others respond, to work on dialog; don't be afraid to write out of sequence, but know that eventually you may have to fill in some gaps; have someone you trust on hand who can read it and give honest, maybe brutal, feedback - someone who is afraid of hurting your feelings will not help you; don't be afraid to over-write on the first draft, and have the courage to edit like a fiend when you are done (don't be in love with every little turn of phrase, etc, as, in the end, it may not be the best thing for the novel when it comes time to edit); take breaks from it - during the next few years, you will be looking at life from several different perspectives - this could only help your novel - just be open to it.

Have a blast. You are creating your own world - one where you will be in quite a bit. Even when you are not actually writing, you will be thinking about characters you've created, and the settings they are in.

Good luck! Writing a novel can be a lot of fun.




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[torker]

Good luck! Writing a novel can be a lot of fun.


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[DJEvelEd]

Here, let ME tighten it up for you:

"The PENIS rose early this morning. The biting of COCK was offset by the warmth of my URINE. The BALLS is blue and it's the kind of PERIOD BLOOD that makes you wonder if there really is a God. The CUNT that once were filled with F’CES have all turned to a VAGINA BLOODFART and gently QUEEF when a ABORTION comes rushing through the TOILET. I sit and SHIT and wonder how it must feel like to be a LESBIAN. Be so GAY one day, only to know that your COCK will be up when the HOMOSEXUAL LOVER comes. Knowing that you will fall to the KNEES and be SPRAYED as new, greener BUNGHOLES will take your place. No one will ever think of CLITS and that one SPERM that fell after a short year of GAYNESS."


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[keithy_19]

Decide upfront if the story is going to be character driven or plot driven


Character driven.

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[Mike Teacher]

Have you ever developed a character or a plot?

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[keithy_19]

Well, the character is based on me.

The thing that I showed here has nothing to do with my novel. That was just me goofing around. I kinda liked the way it soudned though.

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[Katylina]

Can we make an "official" thread where people can place their creative writing pieces on the board? It would be beneficial for editing purposes as well as constructive criticism.




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[JPMNICK]

Knowing that you will fall to the earth and be forgotten as new, greener leaves will take your place. No one will ever think of how that one leaf fell only a short year before."



Just a quick note; if a year had passed as stated above, then you would be back into the fall. But, if you are talking about new leaf growth, then you need to state that a 1/2 year has passed.

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[Mike Teacher]

Keith, what I mean is:

-First, go buy Stephen King's "On Writing". Forget that it's King, it's irrelevant, but he's the master of Character Development, and writes about it. This is not a king novel, this is a book about the Craft of an Art.

You're writing is filled with art. Wonderful. Thats the easy part, the innocence of Blake. Now for Songs of Experience, you gotta learn to put some meat near the adjectives.

You want a character, you, anyone, your Protagonist. While there are no set 'rules' in writing, one could argue, some stuff just reads better then others. Some things would seem to keep the interest of the reader.

Even if its Character driven, this means that Character has a story. He [i'll flip the coin and use He] has a story. He has a beginning a middle, and an end. None of this might be written as such, but it Must exist, for the character to come to life. You gotta get particular, this is what it *is*, not what its like.

Hemmingway. Read "The Old Man and The Sea". Hell just open a page. At a glance it looks like its written at a 4th grade level. Hemmingway loathed adjectives. He didnt describe the character, the character desribed himself by his thoughts and his actions.


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[curtoid]

Well, the character is based on me.
Really cool!

Writing gives us a chance to unearth whatever demons and bullshit we may have. It's a lot cheaper than therapy and a lot more fun.

I only realized after the fact that most of my characters have some element of me in them - some are the worst parts of me / others are the way I would have liked to have been at different stages of my life.

One of the pratfalls with something character driven is that it can come across as being like a soap opera. Don't sweat that too much - concentrate on the actual writing, and being true to the people you are writing about, and it will rock.

I think it was Ben Franklin who said that we should live a life worth writing about, or write about a life worth living. Something like that. I'm bad with quotes.


Can we make an "official" thread where people can place their creative writing pieces on the board? It would be beneficial for editing purposes as well as constructive criticism.

I love that idea, and would be up for it in a heartbeat, but I can see more people being less constructive with their critisism than others - not to mention everyone would have to be very clear about protecting their copyrights.

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[keithy_19]

Thank you all for the constructive criticism.

I have an Englisht eacher who reads my stuff. I've known her sicne I was a baby and she's awesome. She's honest with me too. I wrote a poem(I don't like that term, but then I think that Edgar Allen Poe was a poet and it makes it better) and she was upfront and told me she was dissapointed. She said it was good but that I was capable of doing something so much better.

I agree that we should have a place like that on the board. But the copyright stuff kinda bothers me a little.

EDIT:If anyone ever wants to read some of the story I'mw riting, let me know. PM me or something and I'll be glad to share.

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[Katylina]

love that idea, and would be up for it in a heartbeat, but I can see more people being less constructive with their critisism than others - not to mention everyone would have to be very clear about protecting their copyrights.


Oh God don't talk to me about copyrights. I had that psycho stalker who kept going on about posting a poem she wrote about autism and deleted on my journal. UGH! The bitch finally stopped harassing me after I ignored for a few months. And guess what... no lawsuit.



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[JPMNICK]

i feel that no one should worry about the copyright issue because i am sure all of your stuff is crap anyway.

of course i am joking, and i am copyrighting this post.

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[Melrapuo]

Keith, you should try to make your metaphors more subtle. You seem to be too direct. Here's an example of what I mean.

"He was standing at the back of the bar with cowboy boots and short, frosted hair. Keithy had a black vest and 'Queer of the Year' t-shirt he had won at the local Gay Pride Circus held across town earlier that day. However, all eyes were not on him. The man at the bar (whose name was Fred) became Keith's newest interest. He was a brute of a man, with massive biceps and a 5 o'clock shadow that made Keith's pants tingle with remembrance of his uncle's game of 'Find the sausage in the dark'."

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[keithy_19]

"He was standing at the back of the bar with cowboy boots and short, frosted hair. Keithy had a black vest and 'Queer of the Year' t-shirt he had won at the local Gay Pride Circus held across town earlier that day. However, all eyes were not on him. The man at the bar (whose name was Fred) became Keith's newest interest. He was a brute of a man, with massive biceps and a 5 o'clock shadow that made Keith's pants tingle with remembrance of his uncle's game of 'Find the sausage in the dark'."



I would hate you, but that story is entirely true.

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